Employees must rectify the security issues associated with people that work from home or disciplinary action will be taken. Training and education for your telecommuters will be available if you have issues. It's passive It's redundant It's wordy It's negative

The statement you provided can be considered negative due to its focus on potential disciplinary action rather than emphasizing support and solutions. It also has elements of being wordy, as it could be more concise. Here's a revised version that addresses these issues:<br /><br />"To ensure security for remote work, employees are encouraged to address any issues. Training and education are available to support telecommuters in maintaining security standards."<br /><br />This revision focuses on support and resources, making it more positive and concise.